Rejection Print WIP

I'm currently re-working one of my favourite pictures for print status, the original version is below:

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I'll be going for a slightly lighter tone with this. I've placed this work in progress here to listen to any comments, ideas and criticism, I'd like to hear from you all in what direction I should continue . . . .

The final will sport a hint of blue colour and will be available in sizes up to A3 . . . .

Pencil, Ink, Watercolour, Markers painted over in PS, Painter . . . .